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Debdutta Pal's avatar

I can't meditate, it's a personality...brain..flaw? Now I'm rethinking my whole life.

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Zivah Avraham's avatar

I love this stanza in particular - the image of the morning fold…

“it's vices versus this restlessness,

sober ruminations so dark and cold

like metal on the foggy morning fold,

where darkness meets the rising sun; “

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Jozef Cain's avatar

Thanks Zivah!!! :)

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Annie Lure's avatar

vice versa --> vices versus is a nice maneuver

as well as sand grains transmogrifying into boulders in dream time

oh, and the photo with water and fetishes - so elemental

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Jozef Cain's avatar

Thank you so much for reading and analyzing my work. You have such an elevated grasp of literature, it is truly an honour to be read by you Annie! The image selection is all Edward after considering my original choice and my poem/recording. He is very talented with the editorial side of all of this. I am blessed to be working alongside him. One Love!!

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S y l v i A 🌞 K a l i n A's avatar

Love the rhythm and your wordsmithing. Very nice. And I love the your voice recording. Super smooth.

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Jozef Cain's avatar

One Love SylviA!! Thanks for listening and reading. Thanks for being a part of the BCP community too!

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Peggy Coke Poetry's avatar

“Vice Versa” to “vices versus” scratches my brain just right

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Jozef Cain's avatar

Glad to help scratch your brain. I was very pleased with how it turned out when I decided I wanted to use the phrase "vices versus" after writing "vice versa".

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Elena's avatar

So flowy!!

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Jozef Cain's avatar

<3

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Pixel Floyd's avatar

Stellar job on the voice-over. So ambient.

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Jozef Cain's avatar

Thank you Pix, I am really stoked you and others enjoy the audio. I love producing and the community is helping me have a reason to practice it.

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Devo/Murphy Carpenter's avatar

i love the ambient background sounds

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Jozef Cain's avatar

Glad you like the audio... Thanks for being part of the BCP community!

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Edward Swafford's avatar

Such a cool, understated exploration of the SELF in buh-bye dreamland.

Super dooper spesh 🌪🖤

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Jozef Cain's avatar

<3 Love ya, Swaff man.

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