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Debdutta Pal's avatar

(Both) the final stanzas are pure magic. Greek myths are turning into facts right before our eyes.

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E.R. Davis's avatar

Quiz: Do you want to fly or do you want to sleep with monsters?

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Debdutta Pal's avatar

Fly.

But fictionally? The second one.

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E.R. Davis's avatar

I’ll post the results in two months.

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Mark Armstrong's avatar

One had scaly skin, the other was ABSENT scaly skin. It's pretty clear which one was keeping his appointments with the dermatologist. Anyway, I liked them both! 👍😊

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Just Kayla's avatar

These are both so beautiful

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E.R. Davis's avatar

Naw, your scribble poems did more justice to the gods.

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H. R. Sinclair's avatar

This is simply beautiful. Your two styles working together in tandem and reforming to make a cohesive piece. The uniquely structured stanzas. The imagery. Everything an absolute win!

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E.R. Davis's avatar

Thank you H.R. you're too kind with your words! I was worried it was too stiff but made Jozef do it anyway!

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H. R. Sinclair's avatar

Nah I really liked it! I like the added boundaries to have to work around/with. A little change of pace is always good with me. Brilliant writing, you two!

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Black Coffee Poetry's avatar

These are both well-researched extravaganzas.

Such a banal comment, but it's true! The research that went into this is ridiculous. My Grecian hats are tipped to both of you ^_^.

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E.R. Davis's avatar

I feel like I just got extra credit on my paper!!!

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E.R. Davis's avatar

Joezf I like yours even better with that fifth stanza, it really comes full circle

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Jozef Cain's avatar

We saved the best for last in this post ;) Yours is proper. But I enjoyed writing in a very strict style for a change.

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E.R. Davis's avatar

If you want to get real fancy, we could go for a Ghazal one day

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Marcia Abboud's avatar

Beautiful... 💞

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E.R. Davis's avatar

Thank you!! I love this style of poem. Jozef is a saint for indulging me

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S y l v i A 🌞 K a l i n A's avatar

@E.R. Davis your writing has an effortless flow. So easy to drift away in...

Jozef, of course I'm a fan...

and above all, I'm a fan of collaborations. This is lovely work by both of you!

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E.R. Davis's avatar

Thank you Sylvia!! I'm perfectionist and the lines that I didn't use iambic are going to haunt my nightmares so I appreciate the kind words!

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